It is a poem of desire, love and self doubt. It is an exception to the reality....
Filtering rays from the clouds above,
And a warmth for my eyes as pure love,
I hook onto the moment and smile as I say,
A tickle in my heart and the joyous sway……
An evening of solitude and an eternal bliss,
It was a lakeside and the sensuous kiss…
Fingers mingled and were driving the tide,
I knew its heaven and it just isn’t a ride….
A chirp had never been so melodious,
Feathered one never to me seemed callous,
It was all rhythm and softness for my heart all through,
Owned a trickling joy and a unknown ache all though,
I wished it lingers for a dateless time through my life,
Then I thought have I done enough to have it? Did I?
Amit
24 comments:
But it always lingers in that secret place, hidden behind all those doors of yours...
Good one Amit :-)
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liked the delightful mood in your poem...
very nice think
it sure looks like heaven. very beautiful and dreamy.
very beautiful!
This leaves you with a dreamy feeling...what a wonderful poem :)
Lovely poem.
love it!
A great scene you paint with words. thanks.
hey Amit..that was a lovely poem there :)
loved the flow of words
u simply conjured up the image in my mind :)
keep em coming :D
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you can check my poem at
http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/07/01/thursday-poets-rally-footboard-traveller/
Enchanting romantic and thought provoking -- questioning a love so divine and do we really deserve it?
I love the way you make the words flow like a beautiful river.
Joanny
Ofcourse you did!!! A very beautiful and soothing poem...
Thank you for sharing...
Have a great July, Amit!
Deftly painted in watercolor rhyme. Thank you! Happy Rally day.
Beautiful line:
"I wished it lingers for a dateless time through my life,"
Sweet words.
Gerardine
we always question, and so we should....bkm
Very nice.
Rhyme on!
Tim Keeton
(Undead)Poet / Wizard / Teller-of-tales
sounds like the perfect place...and if its real you dont need to do anything to deserve it. smiles.
thanks guys!! @ brian its all real when you feel it from heart.
your poem is represented now as promised,
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Beautiful. Fantastic Write Up!!!!!
great poem...i love this one...all feelings are beautiful expressed:)
the scenery the mood the emotion the words all beautiful!
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